For this week’s peer review, I’ve chosen Shayma Abbas‘s blog.
In her “Blog #1″although the post was very insightful, I found some grammatical errors that made it very difficult to read. In the first paragraph, I couldn’t figure out what she was trying to explain when she mentions “has inevitably been showcased”. This improves as her post progresses to the second paragraph. In her final paragraph, I find the use of the word “personal” unnecessary, if it is her perspective then it already is personal. Her empathy towards the landscape and references that complemented
Her empathy towards the landscape and references that complemented her view accentuated the appeal of the overall post. I would like to compliment Shayma on her final product, it shows a lot of insight and research.